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The spread of multinational companies and the resulting increase of globalization produce positive effects to everyone. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that globalization and the development of multinational
companies
 are changing the
world
 in a positive way, in my opinion,
however
, I don’t believe that
every
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everyone
each
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 can benefit from
this
 trend. Obviously, there are no arguments that multinational
companies
 and global trades benefit our
live
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 in many ways.
Firstly
, multinational
companies
 contribute to the economy of both developing
countries
 and developed
countries
, because they can reduce the cost of production
of
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 developed nations and create more employment opportunities in developing areas.
Furthermore
, global trades bring produces with lower
price
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prices
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 and higher quality to each corner of the
world
.
Lastly
, communicating among different
countries
 creates multicultural societies, in which people are more open-minded and tolerant.
Although
 there are so many advantages of globalization
which
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mentioned above, I don’t think
this
 development can benefit everyone in the
world
. there are several reasons I can present below.
Firstly
, apart from technology and skills, western
countries
also
 cause
the
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environmental problems in poor
countries
,
such
 as building factories which pollute water and air.
In addition
, the prevalence of products of internationally famous
companies
 easily
stop
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 the development of local
companies
 and brands.
Last
 but not least, local cultures and languages are dying out due to the invasion of
the
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exotic cultures and the
using
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 of English, which is an absolutely negative trend for the civilization of human
being
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beings
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 in a long run. In conclusion, I recognize that the trend of globalization generally influences the whole
world
 in a positive way,
however
, from my perspective, it is quite hard to say that it benefits each person or each body in the
world
.
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