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The spread of multinational companies and the resulting increase of globalization produce positive effects to everyone. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that globalization and the development of international corporation
companies
 are changing the
world
 in a positive way, in my opinion,
however
, I don’t believe that everyone can benefit from
this
 trend. Obviously, there are no arguments that multinational
companies
 and global trades benefit our lives in many ways.
First
 of all, multinational
companies
 contribute to the economy of both developing
countries
 and developed
countries
, because they can reduce the cost of production in developed nations and create more employment opportunities in developing areas.
Furthermore
, global trades bring produces with lower prices and higher quality to each corner of the
world
.
Lastly
, communicating among different
countries
 creates multicultural societies, in which people are more open-minded and tolerant.
Although
 there are so many advantages of globalization mentioned above, I don’t think
this
 development can benefit everyone in the
world
. there are several reasons I can present below.
Firstly
, apart from technology and skills, western
countries
also
 cause environmental problems in poor
countries
,
for instance
, factories, which pollute water and air, are not allowed
opened
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 in developed
countries
 and
then
 built in developing areas .
In addition
, the prevalence of products of internationally famous bodies easily stops the development of local
companies
 and brands.
Last
 but not least, local cultures and languages are dying out due to the invasion of exotic cultures and the use of English, which is an absolutely negative trend for the civilization of human beings in a long run. In conclusion, I recognize that the trend of globalization generally influences the whole
world
 in a positive way.
however
, from my perspective, it is quite hard to say that it benefits each person or each body in the
world
.
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