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In some countries, many people choose to educate children at home by themselves instead of sending them to school. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Recently, the trend of teaching
children
 at home has been prevailing. While some people argue that
children
 may be well-behaviour when having lessons at home, others claim that schools may help improve pupils’ communication skills. As far as I am concerned, the advantages of home-schooling may outweigh the disadvantages.
To begin
 with, home-schooling may bar
children
 from learning several bad behaviours. As
children
’s cognitive developments are immature, they may not have a clear understanding of what is correct and what is not.
As a result
, they may be easily influenced by others once they want to be accepted by their peers.
However
, teenagers may be
under
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closely supervised by their parents once they learn at home,
family
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 members can correct their bad behaviours.
For example
, parents may teach their
children
 to consider other human beings when making decisions which may prevent them from being self-centred.
Therefore
, teenagers may become better social members and help promote social cohesion in the future.
On the other hand
, attending traditional
educations
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 may enhance the communication skills of students. Since some pupils may be the only child in their families, sending them to school may
exposed
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 the younger generation to other peers.
For instance
, they may need to cooperate as well as learn to make agreements with their classmates when doing team projects.
Therefore
,
besides
 academic knowledge, students may
also
 learn about how to make friends and interact with strangers, which may sharpen their competitive edges once they have the capacity to negotiate. In conclusion,
although
 attending formal schools may improve teenagers’ in-person abilities by introducing them to other people, building up a correct habit may be more important.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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