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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?

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Modern society is generating an increasing amount of
waste
 because factories produce a lot of products in high demand without the opportunity to recycle.
Waste
 management has become one of the pressing issues both in developing and developed countries. With the inevitable rise in population and industrialisation,
this
 problem will be
further
 aggravated.The government can help decrease
waste
 production in some ways that will be described below. One of the reasons for trash production is consumerism which became a characteristic of the 21st century. With the development of
e-commerce
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 people started to buy in double sizes. People make purchases without control and do not think about where they put old stuff. In
this
 case, the ministry of trade should consider the possibility of limiting the amount of production of some kinds of
goods
such
 as clothes, plastic and ceramic products, etc.
Moreover
, nowadays children and their parents are illiterate in how to competently use and recycle
goods
.
Thus
, they can not fully grasp how the latter approach litters our planet. The ministry of education should implement lessons of teaching competent use of
goods
 at school that will increase the likelihood of future generations being able to protect our environment.
Furthermore
, in our time we faced a lack of equipment for recycling, mostly due to its substantial cost. The ability to recycle huge amounts of
waste
 is beyond current society's capacity to do so. The ministry of education should allocate money to start-ups for our future and support young entrepreneurs and scientists in their projects. In conclusion, the human population will continue to consume a lot of
goods
. In order to save our environment, the government and the public have to cooperate to find a solution to
this
 ever-present problem.
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