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Many people believe that companies and individuals should pay to clean up the environment in proportion to the amount of pollution they have produced. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
 think that companies and individuals should get charged for the service of cleaning the
waste
 they produced. I feel that
this
 is a good movement, but I think making them clean up their own mess is a much
viable
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more viable
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 approach. When we try to ask
people
 to pay for what they have been doing without needing to pay for it, which
this
 is, they will not be happy and most likely refuse to pay or complain. I agree on the part where we should pay for the service, but not necessarily with money. The amount of money needed to be paid for the huge
waste
 some
people
 produce is not up to par with what they should be charged. We just need to enforce the policy of throwing out trash where it should be, using
less
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fewer
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 plastic products that can’t be recycled, and
also
 volunteer to clean up some trash. The world is becoming more advanced and there are more tools to help us do our daily tasks, and that includes managing humanity’s
waste
. If we can manage to get the resource and creative minds to work on a system where we don’t have to think about the
waste
 we are producing, either by recycling it or cleaning them in a way that
have
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has
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 no negative effects, we will live more sustainably. That just
need
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needs
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 to be thought more by the world, and
hopefully
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,hopefully
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 there will be
people
 volunteering for that. In conclusion, we need to pay for the
waste
 we have produced, but it doesn’t have to be paid with money, we can do a little
labor
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labour
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 and go manage our
waste
 properly by recycling it or putting it away in a safe manner.
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