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Some people believe that children should not be given homework every day, while others believe that they must get homework every day in order to be successful at school. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Few individuals prefer that assignments should not be given to
students
 every day.
However
 ,some believe that they must get
homework
 regularly in order to achieve at school.
This
 essay will discuss both views as far as I am concerned I will be in favour of not giving
work
 repeatedly to the learners.
First
 of all, giving
homework
 to the
students
 feel them burdened and they get exhausted very quickly.They are not able to do extracurricular
activities
 that one should enjoy in
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early childhood.In other ,words they are not able to concentrate on their extra skills as well as interpersonal skill. For ,instance it is proven by the study
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oxford that individuals that focus on
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extracurricular
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extra curricular
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activities
 rather than academics are found to perform better throughout
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life.
Hence
homework
 should not be provided
everyday
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 to the student as it creates a shortage for other
activities
.
However
 few human
being
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 agree that regular
work
 to the
students
 should be given to perform exceptionally well in school.
To begin
 with , Regular revision of a subject helps to retain the knowledge about the subject. It gives a direction to the student to
acheive
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achieve
 and compete with other fellow mates .To demonstrate, regular
homework
strenthens
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strengthens
strengthen
 the academic profile of the student which in
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acess
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access
 them to secure excellent grades.
For example
,
students
 who
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 the
homework
 on time are
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 of teachers and usually are class monitors.
Therefore
, it can be said that children are able to
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achieve
acheive
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achieve
 in
the
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class if they do
there
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work
 on time. According to me , children must not be forced to do
work
 regularly rather ,
their
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 should
be balance
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 in giving
the
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homework
.
Furthermore
, all other
activities
 like playing, dancing etc should be added to
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 lifestyle.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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