Some people believe that money is the most important factor for achieving happiness. However, others believe that happiness has nothing to do with money. Do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion and examples. Write at least 250 words.
In modern
society
we are all surrounded by many things and live in under the assumption that Add a comma
,society
money
can buy anything to lead happy
and peaceful life. While others opine that funds have no relation to Add an article
a happy
deal
with cheeriness. In my opinion, I strongly believe that Wrong verb form
dealing
money
has important
role in our life to bring happiness. In the following Add an article
an important
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I will discuss my point of view in Add a comma
,eassy
details
.
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detail
people
commit thier
entire lives by working hard and earning wages because to buy the needs which gives joy. Mostly some Correct your spelling
their
people
get drepressed
and lose Correct your spelling
depressed
there
lives due to lack of currency, Replace the word
their
people
who find delight in travelling Correct your spelling
different
diffrent
countries and having Correct your spelling
different
a
expensive things Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
could'nt
be savour without having Correct your spelling
couldn't
bank
balance as they can not survive without Correct article usage
a bank
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their
thier
needs Correct your spelling
their
whre
they Correct your spelling
where
is
only one source for all Change the verb form
are
this
is income. For
example
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,example
people
who are sick and need good medication or surgeries and Correct your spelling
required
requried
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require
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capital
capitol
income for Correct your spelling
capital
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their
thier
treatment Correct your spelling
their
thus
it's closely related for
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to
thier
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their
the
happines
.
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happiness
However
,few people
believe that money
cannot remove Correct your spelling
their
thier
sorrows and sufferings. family members who lost Correct your spelling
their
Correct your spelling
their
thier
loved ones cannot bring them back with Correct your spelling
their
money
as it is used for buying things and treatment. For
example
soldiers who lost Add a comma
,example
there
lives in war Replace the word
their
has
nothing Correct subject-verb agreement
have
do
with cash and Fix the infinitive
to do
has
no value. Family Correct subject-verb agreement
have
members
tears can't wipe Change noun form
member's
members'
thier
tears with financial aid, they all need Correct your spelling
their
is
sympathy and support.
To conclude, I personally believe that Unnecessary verb
apply
money
gives lots of benefits to people
likeCorrect your spelling
their
thier
status and lifestyle. It is one of the most significant factors in Correct your spelling
their
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today's
todays
world and every family depends Change to a genitive case
today's
up
on Change preposition
apply
Correct your spelling
their
thier
economy.Correct your spelling
their
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