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Now days more and more people buy and use their own cars . Do you think the advantage of this trend for individual outweigh its disadvantages for the environment ??

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Certainly, it is true that in
this
 modern society the number of people using automobile cars
are
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 getting larger and larger. It is because there are different types of vehicles
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 be bought starting from a normal price to a brand new luxury one.
However
, in my opinion, I think there are more drawbacks than
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advantage. In
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although
 there seems to
be benefit
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, yet, I am more convinced that using our own cars has a big impact on the environment. Obviously, being able to drive our personal car can not only save our time but
also
 travel to anywhere we like easily.
For example
, a working mother can pick up her child at school every day without having to wait for buses or letting her own child come back with a school bus.
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,
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individuals can travel
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 a car either for a business trip or for a vocation.
However
, have we not seen enough that our world has been affected by
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climate change? Obviously, it is due to everyone
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driving their own car
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 consumes a lot of energy and fuels and these vehicles emit the chemicals
such
 as carbon dioxide that
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 to air pollution.
Besides
, the factories
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 to produce a large
amount
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 of cars every year due to the higher demand
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 consumerism.
This
 has been a big issue that industries cause both
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air and water pollution which impact
on
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both human and
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animals as well as the environment we live in. To sum up, it
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can
cen
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can
 be rightly said that there are more
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disadvantages
disadvanges
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disadvantages
 than the advantage of following the trend to use their own vehicles
instead
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public transportation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Personal mobility
  • Convenience
  • Reliance
  • Public transport
  • Enhancement
  • Personal safety
  • Surge
  • Traffic congestion
  • Environmental degradation
  • Air pollution
  • Noise pollution
  • Carbon emissions
  • Global warming
  • Wildlife habitats
  • Economic impacts
  • Public transportation infrastructure
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