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Your car insurance company has told you that they are going to increase the amount you have to pay in insurance for your car each month. You are not happy about this. Write a letter to your insurance company. In your letter explain: - Why you are writing to them - why you think the insurance shold not be increased - What you want them to do

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing with regard to the recent price hike for my vehicle
insurance
 policy issued by your company. My name is Jerry, and I have been your loyal
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customer
customers
cuatomer
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customer
since
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last
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 8 years when I
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purchased
puchased
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purchased
 my Honda Sedan.
This
 goes without saying that
insurance
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 industry is
highly
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 competitive industry and staying with
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 insurer for so long would
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 a lot for your organisation. On
this
 occasion,
however
, your organisation has disappointed me by increasing the
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monthly premium amount for the 2nd time in
last
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 3 months. Since I have become your
policy holder
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, I have never filed an
insurance
 claim which is
a
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proof of the
the
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level of
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 I have put to maintain the vehicle.
In addition
 to
this
, recently, I have
also
 bundled up my home
insurance
 along with vehicle
insurance
.
Hence
, I feel that the increase in the
insurance
 premium is not appropriate. A copy of my
insurance
 policy is enclosed with
this
 letter for your reference, and I would like to request you to reconsider my particular case and reaccess my profile based on the facts mentioned above.
As a result
 of which, I expect you to not increase my
insurance
 premium. I hope you will pay heed to my concerns and consider my case favourably. Yours faithfully, Jerry Malik
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  • thirdly
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  • moreover
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  • however
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