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As Communication Technology develops people are interacting with each other in different ways. Does this trend have more advantages or disadvantages?

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A different form of networking has been developed among individuals due to the immense growth of telecommunication. I will be discussing both merits and demerits, which would be followed by relative examples. To commence with merits, the invention of communication technologies has brought enormous well-being to the
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. In bygone times,
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 tend to share their information with others by means of post, which usually require a longer time to send/receive.
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, these days
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 are connecting to their loved ones through phone calls, and they can see them virtually through video cam.
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, it has lessened the lacuna between the individuals. To exemplify
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, a person who works in a different country would get rid of his isolation from his family through
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 remarkable invention.
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, telecommunication is significant for everyone in order to stay connected.
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, technology has created a barrier between the
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 seeing them live. These days, many individuals often use smartphones and laptops to connect with others
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 of seeing them live, which is perilous to society because these habits would cajole them to stay alone and it will create an indelible barrier.
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, the emotional bond between families and friends will lessen in long run. To illustrate
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, as per the latest communique of the World Health Organization, by the end of the year 2050, the majority of
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 from developed nations would lose their attachments and emotional connectors to their families due to the pervasiveness of electronic gadgets in the society. To conclude, even though there are significant problems due to the rise of these telecommunications, in equal it is giving enormous benefits to the
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.
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, the merits outweigh the demerits.
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