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It is becoming increasingly popular for people to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. Do the advantages of having a gap year outweigh its disadvantages?

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In
this
 contemporary era, many
students
 have many problems in their
scools
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schools
 and colleges so many
students
 take one to two years break from their
study
also
 many other factors play
vital
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 role for why
students
 taking
break
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 . In
this
 essay , I will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of
this
 problem.
Initially
 , in the past
students
 did not take any kind of breaks in their
study
 because they have
preety
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pretty
 clear in their mind which courses are better or which not.
However
, nowadays , all
students
 after completing their 10 or 12 often take some gap between their
study
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 so
in
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the
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 result they can not complete their education in time .
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 , my
neighbours
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 daughter
taken
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break
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 after higher education because
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their parents
not
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have
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 sufficient money
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therefore
 she didn't complete their college
study
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studies
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in
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the
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 result their mind distract from
study
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 and in her college she failed in two subjects. On the other , if
students
 take
break
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a break
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 between their higher
study
 and college so they might be able to find which courses are better and provide them
beautiful
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 salary in future so
therefore
 they
not
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do not
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 continue their
study
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studies
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.
Moreover
, many
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students
student
studens
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students
 have different goals they are going
in
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 another field but they
not
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passes
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 with
good
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oercentage
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percentage
 so they give another time exam and go
their
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 liking field. In conclusion , many brilliant
students
taking
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take
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 breaks
to
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 their
study
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because
becuase
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because
 laking of funds and knowledge
apartfrom
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apart from
this
 it will be not beneficial for everyone but
sometime
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 taking some time for concentration is
good
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 thing so
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therefore
its
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 give better result in
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the educational
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 field.
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