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Competition between older and younger people. Nowadays more and more people who need employment have to compete with younger people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are the solutions?

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In many workplaces, it’s a common conflict between older
people
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 and young
people
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. In my opinion,
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staff
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morale
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moral
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 in numerous ways and can be solved by involving competent
management
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 and hiring practices. In aged-diversified workplaces, issues may arise easily between younger
employees
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 and older
employees
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.
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new
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a new
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 young
employee
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 joined the organization who is well versed with the skills required in the modern technology or the freshness or ideas young
employee
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bring
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 to the
team
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which
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it
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 makes the old
employee
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to
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feel insecure about his/her
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 as he/she may not well very versed with the advancement of technology or the insecurity of preference of younger
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 over older once/ difference of remuneration given to younger
people
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 will impact the morale and efficiency of work or vice versa. In
case
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the case
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 of young
employees
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, they may not feel comfortable with the environment or culture or
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maybe
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may be
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maybe
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 the older
employees
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 make the situations difficult for new
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 as they always have the advantage of being legacy
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employee
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,
rift
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the rift
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among
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between
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 old and young
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employee
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employees
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 can badly impact the performance of
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employee
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the employee
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 and create
unhealthy
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an unhealthy
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 environment in the
team
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 which can be taken care by
management
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 intervention and competent hiring.
Management
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 can play a crucial role in striking a balance between older
employees
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 and young
employees
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. It can segregate the duties among
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, maintain a healthy environment and introduce cross
trainings
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training
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 between
older
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an older
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 and young
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employee
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employees
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 in -order to exchange knowledge and skills, hiring of competent
staff
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, encourage
team
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 bonding activities which boost the morale of
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the employee
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employee
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employees
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 and maintain healthy competition among
employees
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 and give equal attention to each & every
employee
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 irrespective of the age will reduce the chances of
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 problems. To conclude, issues between young
people
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 and older
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employee
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employees
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 can be taken care
by
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of by
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 effective measures by hiring
of
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apply
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competent
staff
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, cross-trainings, equal treatment,
team
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 bonding activities and
actively
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management
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 intervention will combat
such
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 situations in the
team
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.
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