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Some people think that old buildings should be knocked down and give way to modern buildings. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #buildings
In my country, the aesthetic of
people
are
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 changing. Taiwan has a lot of old
buildings
, and some
people
 felt that should be knocked down
,
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 because
was
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 not good at looking. In my way, I hope the old building can keep it well
,
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 because the building
all
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 about
our
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 history of our country. In the paragraphs below, I will tell the reasons why I do not agree with the case.
Firstly
, I think the old fashion
buildings
are
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represent
for
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the history of
people
 who lived in the
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pass
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;
in addition
, the building
also
 can bring
the
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memories to think about the happy time of our childhood.
For instance
, my mother is a nostalgic person,
moreover
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 she always told me she want to buy an old house
as
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 the house she
was
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lived
.
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Secondly
, the
buildings
also
 can
fascinated
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 the foreign
people
 who were
traveling
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 here, because the style is totally different
with
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from
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 their
buildings
.
Beside
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, the modern one
is looks
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 more
fashion
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 than
old
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 one, but if we knocked down the old
buildings
 to make modern
buildings
, that would be not special to me.
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, if you got a present
everyday
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 and nothing
change
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,
then
 you would
be feel
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 really uninterested after
few
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a few
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 days.
In the
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 sum up, personally, I like to stay in really traditional
buildings
, because that can make me feel myself living
in
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the
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 history live. As I mentioned earlier, I like the feeling the old
buildings
 bring to me, so I disagree with knocked down and
give
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 way to modern
buildings
.
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