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An Australian friend is coming to visit you, and it will be his/her birthday during the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: • say how you feel about the visit? • suggest what you could do on his/her birthday? • ask what your friend thinks of your idea? Write at least 150 words

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I definitely think that old
age
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homes
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 offer much better
care
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 than a family could offer as their parent turns older and strongly believe that the
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 should be borne by the
government
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. Many developed nations have built special dedicated old
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homes
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 for their senior
citizens
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 and all their
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-related
expenses
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 are taken
care
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 of by the
government
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. In today's world, most adults are having hectic full-time jobs leaving them with very minimal time to dedicate to caring for their old parents. While an old-
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 home offers quite dedicated and skilled staff to take
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 of senior
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 have special types of equipment required for the daily medical
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 of old people.
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, there is the right set of recreational utilities
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 to keep them entertained and engaged with each other.
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, it has got so expensive, that an average adult family is barely able to manage their own
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 leaving aside taking
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 of the medical
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 of their senior parents. During their work life, an average citizen contributes to the growth of the nation by paying taxes and saving in public provident funds which could be utilized by the
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 for taking
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 of their senior
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. Not all senior
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 have a lucrative retirement income upon which they can bank on. It is the duty of our society and
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 to offer an option to old people to have a stress-free and happy old
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 life where they are well-taken
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 of both physically and mentally in
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 without any worry of
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monetary
expenses
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.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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