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Some people believe that computers are more a hindrance than a help in today's world. Others feel that they are such indispensable tools that they would not be able to live or work without them. •In what ways are computers a hindrance? •What is your opinion?

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The bar graph illustrates how much four nations produce
coffee
 from 1992 to 2012. Overall, Brazil is the
country
 which makes the most amount of
coffee
 in both ages, whereas Colombia and Vietnam decrease and increase their production respectively over the period .
Moreover
, moderate growth is seen in Indonesia.
First
, focusing on
the
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Brazil and Indonesia,the former recorded
at
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about 1.25
million
 tons in 1992 before it surged by roughly 1.75 in 2012.
However
, the amount of production in Indonesia remained largely unchanged in comparison to
other
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 3 countries with its number rising from less than 0.5 to almost 0.75 over 20 years.
Secondly
, moving on change in Vietnam, which stand at approximately 0.1
million
 tons and is the least production
country
 of the
others
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 3 countries in 1992, after which the figure soared to about 1.25
million
 tons in 2012.
On the other hand
, Colombia produced lots of
coffee
 following Brazil In 1992. From 1992 onwards, the number slumped by 0.5
million
 and the
country
 was the least
country
 which produces
coffee
.
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