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Some people believe that computers are more a hindrance than a help in today's world. Others feel that they are such indispensable tools that they would not be able to live or work without them. •In what ways are computers a hindrance? •What is your opinion?

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The bar graph illustrates how much four nations produce
coffee
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 from 1992 to 2012. Overall, Brazil is the
country
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 which makes the most amount of
coffee
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 in both ages, whereas Colombia and Vietnam decrease and increase their production respectively over the period .
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, moderate growth is seen in Indonesia.
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Brazil and Indonesia,the former recorded
at
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about 1.25
million
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 tons in 1992 before it surged by roughly 1.75 in 2012.
However
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, the amount of production in Indonesia remained largely unchanged in comparison to
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 3 countries with its number rising from less than 0.5 to almost 0.75 over 20 years.
Secondly
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, moving on change in Vietnam, which stand at approximately 0.1
million
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 tons and is the least production
country
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 of the
others
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 3 countries in 1992, after which the figure soared to about 1.25
million
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 tons in 2012.
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, Colombia produced lots of
coffee
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 following Brazil In 1992. From 1992 onwards, the number slumped by 0.5
million
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 and the
country
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 was the least
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 which produces
coffee
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.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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