The student who study from the school to university get benefit less and contribute less too, than those of student who go to travel or job and get skills and experience before going high. Do you agree or disagree?
In today’s modern society, there is someone who believes that pupils going to study abroad or applying for a job and gaining skills and experience get benefits more and contributes more, than those that focus on studying. I totally agree with
this
opinion because overseas students bring many benefits to their countries and people who have great skills and experience are overrated by recruiters.
The principal reason why I believe in the claim is that lots of benefits are brought by people returning home after traveling
around the world. They bring more knowledge in participate fields which helps society develop. Change the spelling
travelling
For instance
, the field of technology that is
improved by knowledge and applicants that are brought by those who return home from foreign nations will lead to an upgrading of personal life. In addition
, expatriates can be considered as
a “source of national income”.
Another factor is that companies usually choose employees who are adept and experienced. Change preposition
apply
That is
possible because those can complete successfully assigned jobs, which helps companies save time and earn whole much money. Besides
, a skillful
and experienced person can subtly solve difficult problems that a fresh graduate student can’t tackle. Change the spelling
skilful
For example
, when discussing with customers about cost, inexperienced and unskillful new employee is often forced to mark down.
In conclusion, I completely agree that the students concentrating on studying get benefit less and contribute less too, than those who go to travel or job and get skills and experience before going high. It is because foreign pupils have a beneficial impact on society and expert people are overrated by recruiters.Submitted by domaianh.uliser on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite