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Some people believe that you should strictly control your children’s behaviour, while some others believe children should be free to choose their behaviour. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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these days raising a
kid
 became more difficult day after day, it is actually a huge responsibility and the
parents
 should take it seriously. family think that it must control children's acts, while others believe that children should be free in their actions.
This
 essay will discuss both sides and will draw my personal conclusion. On one hand, people think it should take serious about
kid
action
, in my ,opinion I agree with
this
 at some point, in schools, for ,example teachers must control the
action
 of children ,especially in
age
 5-10 because it is the most important
age
 in the life of a person, the
kid
 in
this
 life will affect in anything he sees and he will try to do the same thing.
In addition
, if
parents
 focus to raise a
kid
 in the
first
 10 years I believe it will be a significant benefit for him and the people close to him.
On the other hand
, others think the child must be free in his
action
 and do whatever he wants, and I
also
 agree with
this
 point in some
age
, to illustrate my word, in the
first
 3 years
parents
 must leave the child to do what he wants and just keep protect him
also
 play with him, after that when he came to
age
 4-6 I believe
parents
 just let him know if the
kid
 did something wrong without punishing him, after that the punishment came when he 7 or more because his actions will affect to the people around him. In conclusion, I believe that raising a boy is a huge responsibility and it should take attention inside communities, I
also
 agree with both points, in fact,
This
 is related to the
age
 of the child to control his
action
.
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