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Because of improved technologies in communication and transport, people in some countries can now choose to live and work anywhere they want. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent years due to
covid-19
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 there was a major lockdown almost everywhere on the globe.
Offices
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 were working fully online &
employees
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 were working from
home
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. In my
opinion
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 the advantages are much more than the
disadvantages
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. It depends on the individual perspective. There are many advantages to
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situation
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 as I feel a person can do
work
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 in his comfort zone rather than going to the office and working. It increases flexibility in
job
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. There are Thousand of multi-million dollar
companies
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 which don't have
offices
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 their
employees
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 are working from
home
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 their meetings are done online mainly on an app called "zoom", though they don't have a proper working space still they are performing well and making huge profits & turnovers. Due to the hit of
Covid-19
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 almost all of the
companies
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 had started their
work
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 online. But ,
eventually
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 most of them got back to their traditional
work
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 style while there are a lot of businesses &
companies
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 who have packed up their
offices
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 and are encouraging their
employees
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 to
work
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 online. As it saves up huge amounts of office expenses &
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 rent eventually employes
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 are happy as they save up a lot on travelling & they can
work
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 in their comfort zone, their travelling time saves up & it drastically helps in less traffic congestion in the city. An individual can live in a different part of the planet and can
work
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 in a different part of the earth as many
companies
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 have adopted
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the online working environment. The company named "Meta" is the perfect example of
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situation
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. Owned by Mark Zuckerberg
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 company has already adapted
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 working environment themself. As far as we are concerned about the
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 to
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situation
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 I feel there are not many of the
disadvantages
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 as the earth are making progress & a lot is changing on our planet. Working style was outdated & the change is a must I feel, it's needed.  ,
Still
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 some major
disadvantages
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 are very less socialization
between
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among
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employees
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. sometimes physical presence is important in some workplaces as everyone will be working from
home
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 it will be impossible to build a good relationship with
employees
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. Some studies say people working from different parts of the world usually job from their
home
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's & in their comfort ,zone their performance efficiency declines gradually. As we summarize
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 essay it shows that the advantages of working from any part o the globe outweigh the
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 of
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situation
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