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Some people think that it is always an advantage to buy local products rather than those made in other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, there has been increasing encouragement for people to purchase locally produced
goods
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instead
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 of imported
products
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.
While
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 buying local items offers several benefits, I disagree with the view that it is always advantageous. In my opinion,
consumers
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 should have the freedom to choose between local and foreign
products
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 depending on their
quality
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, price, and availability. On the one hand, purchasing local
products
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 can significantly benefit the domestic economy. When
consumers
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 buy
goods
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 produced within their own country, they support local businesses, which helps create jobs and boosts economic growth.
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, locally manufactured
products
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 often require shorter transportation distances, reducing carbon emissions and contributing to environmental protection.
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, buying locally grown fruits and vegetables not only supports farmers but
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 minimises the environmental impact caused by long-distance shipping.
On the other hand
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, imported
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 can sometimes provide better
quality
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, more advanced technology, or greater value for money. In many countries, certain items
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 as electronic devices, luxury
goods
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, or specialised medical equipment are not produced domestically or may not meet international standards. Restricting
consumers
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 to local
products
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 would limit their choices and could force them to pay higher prices for lower-
quality
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goods
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.
Moreover
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, international trade encourages healthy competition, motivating local manufacturers to improve the
quality
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 of their
products
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 and offer more competitive prices. In conclusion,
although
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 buying local
products
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 has clear economic and environmental advantages, I do not believe it is always the best option. A balanced approach that allows
consumers
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 to choose
products
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 based on
quality
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, affordability, and necessity is more beneficial for both individuals and society.

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task response
Score: 8. To reach 9, add one more exact example. For example, say how a phone or medical tool from another country can be better or cheaper for people.
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Make your main view even stronger in the first part. You could say that buying local is often good, but it is not always the best choice.
coherence and cohesion
Score: 8. Your order is very clear. To make it even better, make the link between the two body parts more direct: local buying helps a country, but choice and trade also help people and local firms.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are quite long. Split one or two of them into shorter sentences so the ideas are easier to read.
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Your answer is clear. You say you disagree with “always”, and you keep this view from the start to the end.
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You give two good sides: local goods can help jobs and cut travel, while foreign goods can give better quality, lower cost, and more choice.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear four-part plan: start, local side, foreign side, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Linking words such as “On the one hand”, “Furthermore”, “Moreover”, and “In conclusion” help the reader follow your ideas.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • local products
  • foreign goods
  • small business
  • local economy
  • give jobs
  • fresh food
  • less travel
  • save fuel
  • good for the earth
  • high quality
  • low price
  • more choice
  • natural resources
  • international trade
  • work together
  • support jobs
  • pay more
  • better value
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