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More and more people use private cars instead of taking public transport . What are the reasons for this thread? How can the government encourage people to take public transport?

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Humans as we are we go places all the
time
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. We go to work, school, the market etc. In order to move from
one
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 place to another, there is the need to use various means of
transport
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such
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 as bus train and
cars
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. The commonest among these is
cars
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. Many
people
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 prefer using their own
cars
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 as compared to
cars
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 owned by others and serving as a source of livelihood. So many reasons account for
this
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. In
this
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 essay, I will outline some of these reasons and ways the authorities can make commercial
transports
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 popular.
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,
people
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 prefer using their own
cars
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 to travel because they are assured of their own safety since they believe their car is in good shape and they are in their right minds themselves. Unlike public
transport
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 where
one
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 does not know the condition of the
cars
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 or person behind the wheels.
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, most accidents recorded involve public
transport
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 and research
proves
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 mostly, the
cars
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 are in bad condition and was ignored.
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, it is
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time consuming
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 boarding public
transport
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 as compared to using
one
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's own vehicle to commute.
Drivers
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 of commercial
cars
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 usually make unnecessary stops with passengers on board.
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, a driver will now stop on the
way
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 to buy fuel, inflate a tyre or even change a punctured tyre. All these activities
is
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 a waste of
time
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. Others
also
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 make inappropriate stops to carry pedestrians who want to board. Authorities may want to encourage
people
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 to choose public
transport
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 rather than their private
cars
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 maybe as a
way
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 of reducing traffic and congestion.
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 can be done by education. Educating
drivers
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 on road signs and the need to frequently service their
cars
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 is a sure
way
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. When
people
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 realize
change
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the change
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 in
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drivers
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drivers'
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behaviors
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, they will be attracted to using public vehicles. In conclusion, individuals prefer private
cars
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 rather than commercial
cars
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 because
with
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personal
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personally
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 owned
cars
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,
one
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 is assured of safety and no
time
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 waste. Educating and training
drivers
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 is a good
way
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 of making the use of public vehicles popular.
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