Do children behave better when physically punished or rewarded. Do you agree or disagree.

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society. Many people believe that they behave better when punished, whereas others contend that rewarding is the best way.

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, I believe in the latter statement. The essay not only discusses explanations but

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some relevant examples.

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with, on the one hand, acknowledging their work may boost their confidence.

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, when a child does a good thing, if we recognize

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their work, they are motivated to do more of

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a kind.

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, kids are attention-seekers, they actually

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attention, if we are attentive, they may do better tasks in order to grab the focus.

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such

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a thing may

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inspire other kids to do the same.

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, my cousin's daughter, who is

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5 years old

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with her friends and

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to do better, so that others appreciate her

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of her mates.

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this

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is their psychology.

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, frequent assaults may lead to dangerous consequences, which

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the individual as well as society.Elaborating,punishments may cause

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impact on their mentality. Young brains are not matured, so there may be chances of either becoming arrogant and violent, which

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inturn

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effects society or may get habituated to it and

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the same thing.

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,I heard a piece of news about a

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, who turned criminal

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facing similar situations within their family.

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this

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should not be the case. To conclude, I do agree with the statement that children should be pampered rather than

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. Because

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it helps them to progress

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their own,

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this

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aspires

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others to be the same.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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