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Some people think that enjoying the present is more important than planning for the future for both countries and individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is irrefutable that happiness is the utmost priority for everyone to live joyfully, but many individuals opine, that rather than choosing the imminent solution, handling the present situation is more important, which applies to anyone. In my opinion, I disagree with these statements. So, am I going to elaborate on my views on these negative trends,
thus
, leading to the logical conclusion?
To begin
 with,
for instance
, if the students at the school are only focusing on assignments, and do not bother to think about their eventual strategies, they do not cope with the hurdles in their careers. As the result, they will lose their confidence and ability and will bring sadness and depression due to their plethora of regrets.
Secondly
, in
this
 modern era, everyone must work hard to fulfil their ambition and luxurious life with hard earn money. In the other words, populaces who are working with information technology must switch their jobs by learning up to date. So, if people are enjoying the current moment and ignoring
further
 ahead problems, in my opinion, they will be depressed and sad their whole life, and
this
 is not acceptable. In conclusion, in my mind, I agree that everyone has to be right to be happy but always think about their subsequent as well as current situations. Unless it will be serious circumstances in the forthcoming because of their ignorant. I want to opine for those who have better jobs and money in the present always make some assets for their imminent, advise those youngsters who are in college or school, think
further
 ahead and make a plan for a better perspective. It is necessary to think because no one knows what lies ahead.
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