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As the number of private cars has increased, so too has the level of pollution in many cities. What can be done to tackle this increasingly common problem?

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As the number of private
cars
 has increased in the world, the level of pollution has become a very serious
problem
. In response to environmental concerns, we need to find solutions.
This
 essay will focus on some possibilities for reducing the amount of pollution. One possible solution to
this
problem
 is that the government could provide subsidies to encourage
people
 to purchase electric
cars
. Many
people
 are already aware of the eco-friendliness of electric vehicles, but some are concerned about initial vehicle purchase costs. If a number of incentives were available, electric vehicles would be more appealing to consumers and businesses. Another potential solution could be to discourage the use of private
cars
 by raising taxes.
In other words
, taxation on petrol and diesel fuel could be increased to very high levels that
people
 would give up using private vehicles. If the cost of buying and running
cars
 increased, many
people
 would consider using alternative forms of
transport
such
 as trains, buses, and even walking. Improvement in public
transport
also
 offers some scope for curbing emissions. According to a certain journal, car travel is at present diminishing in some urban areas where the local government tries to provide lower fares, special concessions, more frequent services and bus priority lanes.
By contrast
, in rural areas where not enough public
transport
 is provided, citizens have no choice but to drive
cars
, and in
such
 places, governments should provide a major part of the overall financing volume for developing
transport
 infrastructure. To conclude, it seems that there are various approaches to making the
problem
 less damaging. Most of them are expensive, but the pollution is so serious that the
problem
 can not be ignored.
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