SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT READING BOOKS FOR ENTERTAINMENT IS A WASTE OF CHILDREN’S TIME. THEY THINK THAT THEIR CHILDREN SHOULD READ ONLY SERIOUS EDUCATIONAL BOOKS. WHAT IS YOUR OPINION.

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Some parents want the best for their
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children
childern
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children
, they want their
children
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high
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a high
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score
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in
the
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school. So they force their
children
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to read a lot of serious
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educational
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educational
books. As
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an adult
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adult
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, we have to
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what the
children
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want. Do not make our
children
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get
frustased
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frustrated
because we force them. Entertain and
serious
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the serious
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case
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must balance,
children
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also
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need a refreshment by
read
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some entertainment book. So, we just give them
a
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freedom to make a choice
what
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about what
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they want to read. But, we should
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pay attention to them. Do not let the
children
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their reading time only for entertainment
book
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books
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, and they lost focus on their
academic
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academics
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.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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