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In most countries prison is an effective solution to the problem of crime Some people think it is a more effective solution to provide education for those who violate the law To what extend do you agree or disagree

#countries #prison #crime #people #education #law
without proper correction facilities. It's a
system
 that we have been following since civilization and still has its relevance in the present scenario. Recently some
people
 are demanding a prison-free
system
, they argue that educating the law
brakers
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breakers
brokers
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 better solution than imprisonment. I agree with
this
 statement to some extent.
To begin
 with, if we take the example of the lowest
crime
 recorded countries, they all have one thing in common. Which is none other than a perfect prison
system
 and strict rules and regulations. Experts
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 that fear
about
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 strict punishments
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 the most powerful factor that
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 many others from becoming
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.
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 criminal experts
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 that
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 every person has some darkest side buried deep inside
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their mind, so relaxed rules and regulations would be an open invitation to
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 of
people
.
On the contrary
, educating violators
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 effective in certain situations like when
people
who
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commit crimes accidentally. In
such
 situations giving
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 prison statements may affect the
convict
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 behaviour negatively because of the
inmates
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 bad influence.
Furthermore
, education can be used as
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 against
crime
, if
people
 are well aware of the
crime
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 consequences they definitely think twice before committing something wrong. On top of that, these educational
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 create a friendly atmosphere in
people
's
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 so, whenever a
crime
 occurs they approach the law without any fear and misconceptions. To recapitulate, I think it is better to adopt the combination of these two systems for
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. We can not say that one
system
 works in all
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situations. So the blend of these two practices will help the countries to maintain
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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