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Some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and work of arts by using a computer. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, the improvement of technologies causes
people
's opinion toward public
museums
 and art galleries will not be needed because they can see from social platforms through devices or gadgets. As far as I am concerned, I completely agree about the statement and
this
 essay will discuss several advantages that can be given below.
First
 of all, one of the
first
 benefits of
this
 situation is that
people
 can learn or find information quickly through the internet without wasting their time to go public
museums
.
This
 would mean that it is more effective and efficient as well for someone who wants to seek details about historical events and objects by using a computer.
In addition
, they would not need to take time to go to public
museums
 in order to find information. An illustration of
this
 view is that
people
 who have a lot of assignments in their workplace are not able to have leisure time to visit
museums
. In
this
 case, using devices can help
people
 to look for some details on the internet about historical events with a touch of a button.
Secondly
, another benefit would be they do not have to spend their money on visiting art galleries because it required high prices on travel and ticket entry and many
people
 who are from unprivileged backgrounds are not affordable to pay the requirements.
For instance
, one of my friends who live in Aceh is having difficulties visiting Jakarta which has many national
museums
 because of the high fees for ticket transportation and the museum. To sum up, I strongly agree that technologies, today, have benefits for
people
 in learning historical events.
As a result
, many communities will gain knowledge and become more nationalist.
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