People say that success is 10 percent talent and 90 percent hard work. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

There is no doubt that
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a key role in the way
people
lead their lives. While some
people
say that success is
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10
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of skill and 90
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study. I completely agree with
this
statement.
To begin
with,
although
everyone has a talent
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something , they think it is easy to succeed
of
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their field without
work
.
This
is absolutely wrong , society
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to
work
for their field which is
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have
a
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talent.To illustrate, Cristiano Ronaldo is the best player in the world is it because he is working very hard since started
to
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football.
Furthermore
, if you want to
work
hard
to
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your field that you have a talent you need to
work
smartly ,
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and study
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your shortages that will help you to become
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successful
succesfull
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successful
. To continue with, a certain degree of
people
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hard because
of
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they do not waste their time. Despite, they think they will be
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successful
succesfull
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successful
anyway , they did not.
For example
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used to be
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player in Turkey but it was temporarily. he did not
work
and he became a bad player.
Moreover
,if
people
accept that statement and study very hard for their talented area they will reach success and when they do that your labour
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not getting
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. All in all, what can be concluded from
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remarks is that
although
some individuals advocate, I strongly believe
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is play a significant role become a
successfull
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successful
in their area.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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