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Modern lifestyle has made it harder for people to live a healthy and active lifestyle. What are the causes of this situation? Suggest what can be done by the government and large organizations to improve it.

#lifestyle #people #situation #government #organizations
Nowadays, it is undoubtedly that
people
 who work for extended hours over a long period of time are not easy to
living
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 a healthy and active
lifestyle
. In
this
 essay, the causes of
imbalanced
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an imbalanced
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lifestyle
 will be addressed and some possible steps which could be taken to deal with the problem will be presented. To commence with, there
are
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number
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a number
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 of factors responsible for unhealthy
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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 among individuals. One possible reason is that life has become busy in the present time. Not many
people
 find enough time to devote
for
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to
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 doing exercise outside working hours. Because of long working hours,
people
 are exhausted but want to do nothing when they back home or on their holidays.
Moreover
,
number
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a number
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 of community facilities is
also
 not enough, difficult to make an appointment .
For example
,
people
 need to reserve a
badmintion
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badminton
 court
before
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apply
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at least one week before.
On the other hand
, adequate solutions are
also
 available
tackle
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 the problem of poor
lifestyle
 among
people
 by large companies and
authories
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authorities
authorises
.
On
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such
 effective
soulution
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solution
 can be implemented by the governments by creating awareness about
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healthy
health
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a healty
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healty
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healthy
 living
lifestyle
,
invest
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 money in
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establishing
eastablishing
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establishing
 more recreational facilities as well as
sport
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 centres. Apart from
this
, institutions can provide various free activities or workshops as benefits to encourage their employees.
For instance
, one or twice a week during or after work. In conclusion,
imbalanced
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lifestyle
 can have a negative impact
in
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on
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 our community.
Therefore
, in terms of an even greater
extend
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 in the future, governments and corporations should be taken steps to improve it.
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