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Modern lifestyle has made it harder for people to live a healthy and active lifestyle. What are the causes of this situation? Suggest what can be done by the government and large organizations to improve it.

#lifestyle #people #situation #government #organizations
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Nowadays, it is undoubtedly that
people
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 who work for extended hours over a long period of time are not easy to
living
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 a healthy and active
lifestyle
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. In
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lifestyle
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 will be addressed and some possible steps which could be taken to deal with the problem will be presented. To commence with, there
are
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number
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 of factors responsible for unhealthy
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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 among individuals. One possible reason is that life has become busy in the present time. Not many
people
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 find enough time to devote
for
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 doing exercise outside working hours. Because of long working hours,
people
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 are exhausted but want to do nothing when they back home or on their holidays.
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,
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 of community facilities is
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 not enough, difficult to make an appointment .
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,
people
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 need to reserve a
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badminton
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at least one week before.
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, adequate solutions are
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 available
tackle
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 the problem of poor
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 among
people
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 by large companies and
authories
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authorities
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.
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such
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 effective
soulution
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solution
 can be implemented by the governments by creating awareness about
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healthy
health
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a healty
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healty
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healthy
 living
lifestyle
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,
invest
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 money in
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establishing
eastablishing
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establishing
 more recreational facilities as well as
sport
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 centres. Apart from
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, institutions can provide various free activities or workshops as benefits to encourage their employees.
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, one or twice a week during or after work. In conclusion,
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lifestyle
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 can have a negative impact
in
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 our community.
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, in terms of an even greater
extend
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 in the future, governments and corporations should be taken steps to improve it.
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