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Most societies has its homeless people. Some people think that the best way to help them is to give them money. To what extent do you agree?

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Homelessness
 is an issue
for
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in
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 almost every country. There is no one
solution
 to the problem.
However
, some individuals believe that financial aid is the most effective
solution
 to help homeless
people
. For many
individuals
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lack
 of
money
 is the root of
homelessness
. Often, debt, lost bets and
inability
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the inability
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 to pay for needs like
education
 or medication
is
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are
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 what
leaves
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leave
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people
 on the streets. It only makes
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sense
sence
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sense
 that the
solution
 to the problem should be
soved
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solved
saved
moved
 from the root.
In other words
, by giving
money
 to homeless
people
 they will be able to pay off what they need and afford
housing
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.
However
, I believe that direct financial donations are not the best
solution
 for
homelessness
. The reason why
people
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often
offten
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often
 struggle with
money
 is a
lack
 of
education
, inequality and
lack
of
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apply
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job opportunities.
For instance
, those who were not born
in
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into
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 wealthy
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families
familes
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families
 are less likely to
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receive
recive
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receive
 an
education
 and
therefore
 less likely to find a source of income.
Similarly
,
people
 of colour and lgbtq+ community members are more likely to end up with no job and no housing due to discrimination. In my opinion, a better way to assist homeless
people
 in
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achieving
achiving
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achieving
 a better life
,
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 is by providing them with
education
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an education
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 and a job to give them
stable
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a stable
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 income.
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, a stable income will allow them to pay for their housing and their need without having to rely on donations for life. In conclusion,
homelessness
 is a big issue that does not have a single
solution
. Some individuals believe that direct donations of
money
is
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are
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 the best way to assist those suffering from the problem.
However
, I disagree with the statement as the issue is more complex than the
lack
 of finances. I trust that providing homeless
people
 with
education
 and jobs is a
supersior
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superior
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solution
soution
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solution
.
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