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Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that government should spend public money on saving these languages, While others believe that would be a waste of money. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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There has been a controversy about whether endangered
languages
 should be protected by the government. I think it's a waste of money, and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
First
, those
languages
 are extremely difficult and strict. Take Latin as an example. It was the official
language
 of the Roman empire.
However
,
this
language
 is considered a dead
language
 and only high-level educational institutions teach it nowadays. The reason is that the grammatical structure of
this
language
 was too rigorous and complex that only high educational nobles could master it;
therefore
, it didn't prevail among the general public.
As a result
, due to the extinction of the Roman empire,
this
language
 was gradually extincted as well. In
this
 case, it would be an ill-advised decision certainly if the government planned to "resurrect"
this
language
.
Second
, endangered
languages
 represent outmode. It has been reported that many Chinese dialects are in danger of extinction. I think it is not a bad thing because these dialects derived from poor transportation in ancient China. On account of terrible public transport, most people could only stay in the place where they were born;
hence
, my forefathers invented a local special
language
 in order to give the local residents an identity.
Nevertheless
, because of developed transportation, people can go anywhere they want nowadays basically. At
this
 point, dialects are considered the signs of isolation and under-development.
On the other hand
,
languages
 are the witnesses of history; it's our responsibility to preserve our history and it's our duty to prevent them from being extinct. In
this
 case, were the government to spend money on saving these endangered
languages
, it would be better. In conclusion, I believe the demerits of spending money on saving endangered
languages
 outstrip their merits.
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