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Some people say that Ebooks and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspapers and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today's world,
technology
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 has become increasingly common, especially with the use of e-books.
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, some argue that these books have started to replace the traditional ones
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 as
newspapers
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 and magazines. I do not completely agree with
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 idea because
newspapers
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 are the more traditional, easiest, most accurate, and cheapest way to get news. On the one hand, there are multiple reasons why the traditional ways of getting news are still popular. First of all, reading the newspaper has become a must habit, especially for older generations which are not adapted to the new
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 world.
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, those who desperately wait for paper in the morning and enjoy it reading with a cup of tea
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 touching the material of the paper provides traditional wonts.
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, the sound and feel of the material
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 flipping the pages provide unintentional positive effects to the users.
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, the usage of
newspapers
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 and magazines is cost-friendly, more accurate, and more accessible to reach the
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.
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, in Turkey, more middle-class communities prefer
newspapers
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 rather than e-books in terms of being available at an economical price. Not only that reason but
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 the given
information
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 is more current and available in many areas
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 as supermarkets.
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, undoubtedly,
technology
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 has given a radical approach to reading news,
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, videos provide a full and clear view of reading.
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 that, individuals can download, share, and forward them to their relatives and friends.
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,
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 trend may produce some inaccurate
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 among the users.
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, a person who is reading an e-book may not acknowledge whether the given
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 is actual or not.
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 may lead to the result of false claims and statements over the users.
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, the lives of people are not dramatically affected by advanced versions of
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 yet, in my opinion,
newspapers
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 and magazines will not totally replace the existence of
technology
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 because of people's habits.

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task achievement
The introduction presents your viewpoint but could be more explicitly stated. Consider rephrasing to make it clearer that you partially agree with the statement.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are generally organized, but try to improve the connection between some paragraphs. Adding transition phrases can help clarify the relation of ideas.
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Some points, such as the argument about e-books providing a clear view of reading, could be expanded. Provide more detail or examples to strengthen your case against the claim of total replacement.
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Your essay addresses both sides of the argument, which is great for showing a balanced perspective.
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The use of personal anecdotes and specific examples, such as the reference to Turkey, adds credibility to your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • eBooks
  • digital media
  • traditional newspapers
  • magazines
  • modern technology
  • replace
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • interactive features
  • environmental benefits
  • paper waste
  • news consumption habits
  • on-demand content
  • sentimental value
  • tactile experience
  • digital divide
  • misinformation
  • editorial standards
  • historical record
  • screen time
  • health impacts
  • media consumption
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