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Nowadays, people who live in cities have to encounter many problems. What are these problems? What can be done to solve these?

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It is widely acknowledged that these days when
people
 reside in metropolises, they have to face a number of
problems
.
This
 essay will identify these
problems
 and
then
also
 put forward some feasible solutions to address them. In reality, there are various
problems
 that
people
 living in cities are likely to encounter. One obvious issue is that
people
 who reside in many cities have to face traffic jams during rush
hours
.
For instance
, the
hours
 from 6 a.
m
 to 8 a.
m
 and 5 p.
m
 to 7 p.
m
 is peak
hours
 in Ho Chi Minh city. At
this
 time, there are congestions of vehicles on the roads, especially the main road connecting the inner districts. The other problem that needs attention is the lack of residential land. In Ho Chi Minh city, the ratio of the land area and the population is too low,
this
 leads to too many
people
 having to live in the narrow space.
As a result
,
this
 has negative effects on mental health and quality of work. Despite these
problems
, some possible solutions are suggested to alleviate these
problems
. The
first
 feasible measure is that the government needs to improve the quality of transport infrastructure by widening roads and to limits personal vehicles participating in traffic on city
center
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 roads during peak
hours
. The
second
 approach is increasing the construction of apartments at an affordable price to make it more convenient for the low–income population to be able to buy. In conclusion,
although
people
 living in urban areas have a variety of
problems
 to face, there are some ways to reduce them.
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