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Nowadays, people who live in cities have to encounter many problems. What are these problems? What can be done to solve these?

It is widely acknowledged that these days when
people
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 reside in metropolises, they have to face a number of
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.
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also
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 put forward some feasible solutions to address them. In reality, there are various
problems
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 that
people
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 living in cities are likely to encounter. One obvious issue is that
people
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 who reside in many cities have to face traffic jams during rush
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, the
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 from 6 a.
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 to 8 a.
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 and 5 p.
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 to 7 p.
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 is peak
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 in Ho Chi Minh city. At
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 time, there are congestions of vehicles on the roads, especially the main road connecting the inner districts. The other problem that needs attention is the lack of residential land. In Ho Chi Minh city, the ratio of the land area and the population is too low,
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 leads to too many
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 having to live in the narrow space.
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,
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 has negative effects on mental health and quality of work. Despite these
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, some possible solutions are suggested to alleviate these
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. The
first
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 feasible measure is that the government needs to improve the quality of transport infrastructure by widening roads and to limits personal vehicles participating in traffic on city
center
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 roads during peak
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. The
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 approach is increasing the construction of apartments at an affordable price to make it more convenient for the low–income population to be able to buy. In conclusion,
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people
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 living in urban areas have a variety of
problems
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 to face, there are some ways to reduce them.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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