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It will be better for society and individuals if driverless cars are widely used. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement？

#society #individuals #driverless #cars #statement？
Today, driverless vehicles are becoming increasingly popular.
Although
 there are only 1% of self-driving cars on the roads, some think self-driving cars could bring a lot of benefits to everyone
thus
, people should be encouraged to invest in them. In my perspective, I totally agree with
this
 statement because it could bring several benefits to society and individuals.
Firstly
, self-driving cars help individuals to avoid unnecessary accidents and use their free time on something productive. We could hear that many individuals meet with accidents due to lack of concentration.
For example
, a recent survey done at Melbourne University shows that 40% of accidents occur simply because people are trying to engage in another work while driving.
In addition
, self-driving helps to save time
thus
, you can actually use that time doing something productive.
For instance
, a recent survey shows in India that an average person spends more than 04 hours on the road every day . These are some of the main benefits we could gain from using driverless vehicles.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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