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Some people believe that children should not be given homework everyday, while others believe that they must get homework everyday in order to successful at school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays,
children
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 get more
homework
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 from
school
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 and feel stressed about that. Some people think that schools should not give
homework
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 to their students on daily
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, while other individuals claim that they should get
homework
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 on an everyday
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 in order to succeed at the institution. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both views and explain my opinion in the upcoming paragraphs and, I will explain my reason for it. There are many reasons why some people think that it is better to not give
children
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homework
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 on an everyday
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.
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 and foremost, it will be helpful for them to get relief from workload and stress.
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, if students get more
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 from
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 on daily
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then
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 they felt on
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 due to incomplete
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.
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, if
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 provide them task on weekly
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 only
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 it might be helpful for them to get time for sports and games, which are
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 important for their both mental and physical fitness.
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 , sports play an important role in Education.
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, they can do
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 other
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 as well as
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 as they can involved with household chores with their family which is
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 one the most important work for them to do.
On the other hand
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, some individuals claim that
children
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 should get
homework
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 from institutions on daily
basis
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 in order to succeed at
school
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.
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, they will do better results if they get more
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 from teachers,
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 is because, they will involve more in education compared to other
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,
as a result
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, they have many chances to do better results in exams.
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, if
children
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 will get more
tasks
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 from
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then
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 they will focus more on their studies, which is more crucial for them and it will help them to divert in a positive direction. In conclusion, both statements
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 their own benefits.
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, in my opinion, I think that schools should give
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 to their students on weekly
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 and if they will provide
tasks
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 on daily
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 so give them minimum
tasks
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, which will be beneficial for them to do.
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