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Many people say that globalisation and the growing number of multinational companies have a negative effect on the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

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The given table compares various aspects of demographic data from
Australia
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 and
Malaysia
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 in 1980 and 2002. In general,
Malaysia
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 had a relatively younger
population
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 than
Australia
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 and remarkably faster
population
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 growth. According to the table, it can be seen that the gender ratios in both countries were probably balanced. There were slightly more women in
Australia
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 and slightly more men in
Malaysia
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 in both years.
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, the difference in
population
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 between the two countries in 1980 was minimal, at only about 1 million.
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, the difference was around 5 million in 2002, as the
population
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 of
Malaysia
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 almost doubled. The two countries
also
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 differed obviously in terms of the birth rate. The birth rate in
Malaysia
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 was almost two times higher than that of
Australia
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 (3.2% and 2.2% compared to 1.5% and 1.3%).
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, the average annual
population
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 growth in
Malaysia
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 was
also
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 higher. Another significant feature is that while the percentages of people aged over 65 in
Malaysia
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 were approximately 4% in both years, the figures for
Australia
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 were much higher, at 9.6% and 12.4% in 1980 and 2002, respectively. Overall, the number of fresh graduates appears to have increased over the given period. According to the bar graph, it is clear that the majority of UK students chose to follow professional careers after graduating. In 1992, there were roughly 165,000 British students graduating from university.
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 figure rose to a peak of 195,000 in 1997,
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 dropped to about 180,000 students in 2002. burying waste underground is illegal in my country.
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