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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Is this a positive or negative development?

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Advancements in technology have brought a notable difference in the way
people
 communicate with each other.
This
 has resulted in fewer in-person contacts and a lack of empathy for the near and dear ones around oneself
thus
, I see
this
 as a negative development. Video conferencing is a key invention in
this
 digital world.
Although
this
 has enabled
people
 across the world to connect, it has reduced the efforts taken by individuals to connect in person.
This
 is because even
people
 living across the streets tend to connect virtually rather than meeting face-to-face
thus
, there is no possibility to establish a heart-to-heart connection in any relationship.
Moreover
, there is no sense of trustworthiness or an attachment built in a relationship which makes technology a negative development.
On the other hand
, new social media platforms are being developed every day which allow the exchange of thoughts, ideas and even feelings over memes and text messages. When the communication is established in a written form, it is impossible to identify the true intentions behind one's words which makes it difficult to connect when
people
 are in person.
Also
, the adults spend most of their time on these social media sites
thus
 leaving behind the
people
 at home making them feel lonely and left out.
Thus
, I consider these advancements a negative development. In conclusion, though technology has brought
people
 together virtually, it has created a void between them making it difficult to establish a trustworthy relationship and has made the older generation insecure
thus
 creating only a negative impact.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interact
  • Social media platforms
  • Networking
  • Instant messaging
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Misunderstandings
  • Emotional context
  • Superficial connections
  • Deceptive identities
  • Privacy concerns
  • Social skills
  • Video calls
  • Online presence
  • Digital communication
  • Cyber relationships
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