You are a member of a sports club in an old building. Now, all the members are asked to provide suggestions to the manager of the club about the improvement of the club's facilities. Write a letter to offer some suggestions. In your letter, 1. describe your suggestions for improvement 2. describe what benefits the members can obtain after improvement

Dear Mr Smith, I am writing in response to your letter asking us to give our opinion on the renovation of the building. I have been one of the members
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sports club since two years ago, it is my pleasure to share some ideas about the matter.
To begin
with, the changing room is in urgent demand of improvement. The door locks can not work properly and are so old that they give me a sense of insecurity whenever I use them.
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, there are some dark spots around the swimming pool, proper lighting would be the best solution. If these problems could be addressed, I believe that it would become a safer place for all the club members to enjoy doing sports . And, there will be no more risk of slipping on the wet floor at night. Thank you for your effort, and I look forward to the changes in the future. Yours sincerely, Kelly Hsu
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