Some people believe that the government Should take care of old people and provide financial support after they retire. Others say individuals should save during their working years to fund their own retirement. What is your opinion? Give reason for your answer and include examples from your own experience

Some people believe the

the

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government

should finance

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social

services

like retirement

pension

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pensions

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for adults

instead

of spending its budget on public

services

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need

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needs

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while others say

individually

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individuals

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should save their

fund

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funds

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during their working years.

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the upcoming paragraph and

subsequently

will explore perspective in turns. On the one hand,

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I believe

government

should definitely allocate

large

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part

of

it's

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budget

on

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public

services

. The

government

economic sector

determine

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overall

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quality of life, ensuring the basic sector

such

as school, hospital and roads are available to all the

citizen

irrespective

their

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income and social

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states

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. The public

services

are needs are primary needs of

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society and

thus

needs

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proper funding.

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,

absence

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of medicine in any country will create significant problems. That's why

government

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the government

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should adequately finance

on

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public

services

in

first

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the first

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place.

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old is normal

things

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to

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everyone

however

younger

citizen

are participate important role

for

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the

country

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economic growth.

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adult

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adults

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are

vital

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part

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every family.

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encourage their close ones  as well as

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their experiences. I think adult must save their funds during their working years.

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old people

also

are

integrate

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part

of

the

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society. Some ancient could save their money but most

of

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old

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the old

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citizen

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citizens

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could not save money because of high expenses. I think

government

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the government

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should provide free medicine and

treatments

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treatment

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of

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low income

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citizens.

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,

in

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Sri Lanka

have

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been

provide

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free hospital treatments for citizens. In conclusion, after a thorough analysis of the topic,

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I believe

government

should allocate its budget for argent needs.

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old

citizen

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citizens

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also

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crucial

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part

of

the

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society. I think

government

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the government

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should implement

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a long

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long term

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long-term

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concept for

this

problem

thus

if not it becomes

huge

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impact

of

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their life.