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It will be better for society and individuals if driverless cars are widely used. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement？

#society #individuals #driverless #cars #statement？
Technology dominates
the
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human life today. It has been interwoven
in
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 our routine life. Some people are of the opinion that
wide
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use
 of self-driving
cars
 will absolutely benefit mankind and communities. I partially agree
to
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this
 statement, for some reasons which are
further
 explained in
this
 essay. Encouraging the
use
 of driverless
cars
 will no doubt be beneficial to man, especially in the ecosystem as they operate on battery power.
This
 is due to the fact that the number of fossil fuel vehicles will be reduced.
As a result
 of
this
, there will be
significant
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 reduction in the amount of dangerous air emitted by these
cars
.
For instance
, many countries promoting the
use
 of self-driving
cars
 said air pollution in their region was reduced by at least 67%. To add to
this
,we will be able to have fresher air free from toxic gases.
On the other hand
,
cost
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 of these
cars
 will be expensive as it is more advanced in technology than the regular types. Making it difficult for an average individual to afford.
Additionally
, taxi drivers tend to
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loose
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 their jobs if auto
cars
 are to be more in
use
.
As a result
 of
this
, they won't be able to fend for themselves and provide for their families and
such
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 can lead to depression.
For example
,a depressed taxi driver who is under therapy once revealed,that he lost his source of income because his formal company bought
fleet
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 of self-driving vehicles and
layed
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laid
 off many drivers which lead to his current mental state. In conclusion,it will be wise to say that driverless
cars
 will cause more harm than good for
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society at large.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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