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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of diverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages.

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some people have speculated that in near future all the vehicles
such
 as
cars
, buses and trucks will be automated with the constant flourishment of technology.
Although
 it has connected with some demerits as unemployment and technical issues, I tend to agree that
this
 would have more benefits and the following paragraphs will describe the reason behind my opinion.
For instance
, seld-driven vehicles will save the time individuals have spent learning and improve their driving skills.
Moreover
, the time which people spend just travelling by themselves can convert to do more efficient work
such
 as reading a book or preparing for the
next
 task of the day
likewise
. These automated
cars
 are programmed using artificial intelligence.
Therefore
, it helps to reduce collisions which can happen due to careless
drivers
 and passengers. For example, Tesla has experimented with their self-driven
cars
 in Germany for the past few years and it has clearly shown
this
 driver-less car reduced road accidents by 30% total in the year.
However
, these self-commute
cars
 can create a huge issue regarding unemployment. Taxi drives, bus and truck
drivers
 will lose their jobs and over time there won't be any job market called
drivers
. Even though it happens, different job opportunities wii born with
this
 new trend. To exemplify, bus
drivers
 can have a job as a mechanic or give their contribution to mapping and programming the roads. To conclude, while the aforementioned advantages may have drawbacks connected to employability, there is a reasonable scope to consider
this
 fantastic idea; driverless vehicles because of their efficiency and effectiveness.
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