Many people are opting for several careers as compared to a single career to earn more money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The single
career
option
is not so
fascinated
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nowadays. The new trend is to have many earning
options
and educational qualifications will be continued
along with
an individual in an entire
life
. I agree to some extent because it depends on an individual’s choices.
Although
strong-minded people can make their
career
and earn money in the same field because of personal choice, multi-
career
humans can easily earn and enjoy their
life
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completely. On the one hand, we would see many professionals spending their whole
life
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in a single field only. It is being noticed that they focus on one skill and
trained
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themselves
accordingly
, practice starts
since
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their
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young age to become
master
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in that particular field.
For example
, there are many
sports persons
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who do not concentrate on their educational qualifications, they ought to
be indulge
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in their game for
the
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their
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entire
life
. So,
single
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earning
option
is
also
not outdated, it depends
person
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to person.
Nevertheless
, the choice of having numerous earning
options
is a new trend nowadays, educational qualifications carry on with
his
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him
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/her for the whole
life
.
This
portion of
population
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the population
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want
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to make more money on the basis of personal interest by doing work in more than one
fields
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field
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.
For instance
, so many corporate
going
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professionals are into some other business too. Like, Music, Dance, Fitness, and so on. I opine that
this
populace
live
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life
as
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fullest
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by making gross from both
options
.
To conclude
,
although
a new fashion is to have many earning
options
and degrees continue
along with
an individual in an entire
life
, the single
career
option
cannot be ignored. My opinion is that many
career
option
is
better
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a better
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choice to live
a
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best
life
and
more
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have more
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earnings
along with
your school and college degrees.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job market dynamics
  • skill diversification
  • technological advancements
  • income potential
  • gig economy
  • flexible opportunities
  • financial necessity
  • economic instability
  • insufficient wages
  • work-life balance
  • burnout
  • continuous learning
  • development
  • social pressure
  • peer pressure
  • career trajectory
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