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some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is apent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree ?

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It is believed that learning has two ways to be achieved, either by learning
facts
 or practising the skill.Recently,
this
 topic has been a heated debate between proponents and opponents , for proponents' perspective is spending time on learning
facts
 helps the
children
 to learn more , while opponents' perspective is practising is a crucial way of learning. In
this
 essay , I agree that there is a tremendous amount of time spent on learning
facts
 because
facts
 help in learning new
information
 and constructing
children
's personalities. On one hand ,
facts
 help students to gain
information
.
In other words
 , the more
facts
 a person gains , the more knowledge he will obtain.
For example
 , a recent study , which was done in Egypt by a group of scholars , found that two-thirds of students' lives are spent on gaining new
facts
 and
this
 help in gaining better
information
.To conclude , new
facts
 help in better knowledge. On top of that , it is believed that if we do not learn new
information
 , we will not learn new subjects.To illustrate , many must go through a plethora of
facts
 to obtain new knowledge about a certain subject , and
this
 leads to learning it. Recently , a paper has been published that found that
children
 consume an amount of their early childhood learning
facts
 that help in constructing their personality. To summarize ,
facts
 have an insignificant role to gain in
children
's personality construction . All in all , taking all the above-mentioned points into consideration.
Facts
 are the building blocks of the process of learning. without its ,help we will not gain any new
information
 and we can not build youth.
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