Museums and art galleries should focus on works that show the history and culture of their own country rather than works of other parts of the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the entire ,world we have symbols of our ancient which have been protecting from them on museums. Some people believe they have a priority target only on their professional product which is produced in their own society in spite of

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on foreign country's art. I believe we have to defend both of them and I want to explain why in the

two principles.

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, Some of them are handsel that other nations gave to us.

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, in ,Iran we have lots of gifts from other countries which they donated to our king as

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or because of a ceremony. In , the fact they are gifts and demonstrate to us how important we were to another country and showcase the tradition of their people.

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, In my view, Inside all art includes its artist's passion and intellectual, unique mind, and

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worth which we have a responsibility to conserve all the arts even if they aren't for ours.

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, yesterday I visited a royal place in Niavaran Tehran and in the art ,

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I saw a beautiful work of the reputiutial artist (Picasso) which was really astonishing painted and donate to Reza shah in 1962.

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focusing on and protecting foreign land need spending a lot of human power and money. in conclusion, I want to restate my opinion that all arts have worth inner and if they were gifts from other country show us historical value, So not only do we

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we should appreciate that because of their importance to us.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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National Identity
Cultural Heritage
Cultural Exchange
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Global Harmony
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Museums and art galleries should focus on works that show the history and culture of their own country rather than works of other parts of the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

In today's very competitive world, a worker has to possess multiple skills to succeed. Among the skills that a worker should possess, which skill do you think is more important, social skills or good qualifications? Explain the reason and provide specific examples to support your answer.

In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is argued that mobile phones and other electronic devices have no place in the classroom. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?