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Task 2: To succeed in business, one needs to learn and know math. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#business #math
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Some people believe that mathematical knowledge is needed for individuals to flourish in the
business
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 environment. While I believe knowing
math
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 can support entrepreneurs significantly, I am more convinced that it is not necessary to learn
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 to achieve
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 goals. On the one hand, a great familiarity with mathematical concepts can give
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 people a competitive advantage.
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 with, managers who have strong knowledge of calculation can easily control their businesses’ financial figures.
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,
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 can help them to make realistic decisions related to sales growth, budget management and investment attraction strategies.
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, on Shark Tank, a TV program allowing start-up founders to connect with potential investors, start-up companies that can show understanding of their businesses’ financial status, based on
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 calculation, usually get chances to receive a massive amount of investment.
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, I am of the opinion that the success of businesses does not entirely rely on
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 knowledge.
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, thanks to technology development, various tools of computation and visualization are built, which are not only user-friendly but
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 able to illustrate financial data and trends. These tools allow people without finance-related backgrounds to understand figures by visualization. In
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 case, the decision-making process can depend more on
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 understanding and market insights rather than focusing on calculation.
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, businesses can seek support from
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-party financial services, who are experts in related fields
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 as tax and accounting, so that companies can concentrate on
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 core activities including product development, marketing, boosting sales or operations to reach their targets. To summarize, I agree that a good grasp of
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 can contribute to entrepreneurs’ success.
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, I am more convinced that businesses can
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 attain their goals without deep
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 understanding by asking for the support of technology tools and financial experts.
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