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Nowadays environmental problems are too big for individual countries or people to solve. We have reached the stage where we need cooperation on an international level to protect the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The rise of urbanization in different countries has led to
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 level of pollution that affects people worldwide. While I do think that each individual on earth has a responsibility to take care of it, I do believe that the key to preventing the destruction of the environment is cooperating
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 an international level.
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, nature is the one that provides us with the things we need
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environmental problems due to their immense manufacturing industry. Aside from that,
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global warming
  • climate change
  • cross-border impacts
  • unified global response
  • biodiversity loss
  • geopolitical boundaries
  • international cooperation
  • renewable energy projects
  • collective responsibility
  • environmental degradation
  • international agreements
  • scope and impact
  • environmental challenges
  • policymaking
  • plastic pollution
  • marine environments
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