Children as young as eight own a mobil phone nowadays. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages ?

Mobile
phones
are the tool of our age, every
one
has
one
these
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shiny flat screens. Their popularity is connected to the fact, that they are key to almost
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everything
evertyhing
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everything
, not only calls. There is nothing which can not be done by or with the mobile
phone
. We pay, order, sleep and dance etc. with it. Despite
of
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the fact that
phones
are
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usually
usally
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usually
made for and by adults, more and more young
children
are to be seen with
such
.
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the wonder if
this
development is positive or not. On the
one
, a
phone
can be
surley
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surely
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beneficial
benefical
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beneficial
for a
child
as it can reach their parents or other important contacts at any given time
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versa.
This
is especially very
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beneficial
benefical
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beneficial
for young
children
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around
aournd
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around
8, who just started school and who
are
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out and about at least 5 days a week.
For instance
, if a
child
would get lost on their way to school they could, thanks to their
phone
, call their parents and ask for
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guidance
guidence
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guidance
.
This
also
counts the other
ways
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around, speaking that their parents can call or text their kid in case
ofo
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of
worry.
Phones
for young
children
could
therefore
be seen as a security package.
On the other hand
, is there a huge disadvantage
concernig
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concerning
the combination of young
children
and mobile
phones
.
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As a
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young
child
, with a yet undeveloped personality might be consumed by the addictive
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,
social-networking
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and entertainment options a
phone
optains
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obtains
options
and
this
could lead eventually to mental health issues. As an example could a
child
develop
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as a result
of using the
phone
before going to sleep or develop problems
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concerning
concernig
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concerning
their social
behavior
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as they might reduce their actual social contacts while having more social contact
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through
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trough
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the
phone
.
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To conclude, there are both negatives and
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positives
to allowing
children
to have their very own
mobil
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mobile
phone
. On the
one
they
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partners
partens
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parents
might be less
concered
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concerned
about having the
child
out of the house by
it self
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itself
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but
on the other
hand
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are these
phones
addictive and not got for their mental
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health
heatlth
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health
.
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In my
opinion
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children
are allowed to own mobile
phones
, but only those without data
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

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