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Research has shown that consumerism is a major problem of the young generation due to the effect of the media. why and what are the consequences?

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this
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 day and age, consumer spending is greatly affected by the use of
media
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 influencing the youngsters leading
towards
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a
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considerable concern. There are certain reasons
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this
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 phenomenon and its aftermath.
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,
media
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 is ubiquitous nowadays, making
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 way to convey consumers to splurge on goods and services. The vulnerable millennials are in great trouble because of the different social
media
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 platforms that serves
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 as a tool for advertisers to endorse their brands. Facebook and Instagram,
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, made their way to
sell
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 products
on-sites
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 by posting
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links or they can just buy
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them
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 on the website itself.
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,
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 trend makes young adults
to
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have
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impulsive buying behaviours.
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, the
media
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 has made the younger generation
to
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imitate their
favorite
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favourite
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 celebrities through different social
media
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 platforms as well. With
this
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, they would have to buy what brands and designs are being advertised so that they would feel that somehow they were able to display the same way
like
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 how their idols do.
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, the feeling of missing out on the latest trends is one factor
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 that drives young people to disburse their money
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.
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 is a result of their peers pressing them to keep up with everyone else. The acquisition of
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 material possessions
like
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 the latest iPhone and Apple Watch on the market make them want to have it as well which
media
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 are continuously trying to attract people. With all the reasons stated above comes the consequences
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 these actions. The number one end result of
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tendency
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a tendency
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if
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is
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 for the youngsters to be buying unnecessary stuff
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 of buying basic necessities like food. Another consequence would be,
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 youngsters would feel isolated and out of date if they are unable to purchase what
are
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 popular nowadays. In conclusion,
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 consumerism is of great benefit for businesses and the economy of a country, it is of
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 issue on the part of millennials with the help of
media
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 making them waste funds on unnecessary stuff.
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