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new stories on TV and newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. some say that these pictures are more effective than words, what is your opinion?

#stories #tv #newspapers #pictures #say
Pictures
 in newspapers and TV are used very less but somebody believes that
pictures
 are more effective, in my
opinion
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 a photo could make a great imagination of a condition,
then
 readers and viewers could make a good image from the report are reading or watching. In ,Fact many reporters or writers use photos for
a new stories
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new stories
a new story
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because a photo
make
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makes
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 a general idea about the new story.
Firstly
 many people are visual and by seeing a condition could understand better than other senses. For ,Instance most
of
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apply
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the
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men are visual and they have better recognition of visual facts.
Then
 it would be nice the new stories come up from these kinds of people
by
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through
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 some
pictures
.
Secondly
,
pictures
 could explain lots of things just without any words,
For example
 when you want to talk about a beauty of a people or a place you need to use lots of words and explain in a long story, but
finally
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 the reader can not make a good imagination as you see,
also
 any readers would have a different idea from the description.
then
 by showing a photo of the related subject the reader has a right and effective imagination. Summary, If we use some
efficiency
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 photos in order to describe the situation of the new stories, it would be more effective to impress the readers and audiences.
Then
 it would be nice if the reporters attempt more
pictures
 on the TV in newspapers.
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