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Band 7.5

Every year your company organizes a sports event for a local community, but this year they can’t do it. Write a letter to your local newspaper about this. In your letter – Express your feelings about missing the sports event – Tell them about your plans for next year – Explain how this sports event is useful.

Dear Sir, I am writing
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United India, will not be hosting our annual sporting
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 called "The CWG" because of financial stress.
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 with, our company has incurred a few heavy losses in
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 fiscal
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. I believe, two of our major contracts with one of our biggest clients went off the hill and it still poses a lot of complexities, especially financial, in hosting
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year
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's
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. In the wake of
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, I am really disturbed to
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 day as
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event
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 adds a plethora of value addition to our community, particularly teenagers.
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, we are certain that we will bounce back next
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 with great enthusiasm as before. I believe a new committee has already been set up, ensuring that our budget for the next
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 not be affected regardless of our financial position. As you already know,
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event
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 is a great medium for college-going students to seek scholarships from the leading universities of our country if they are exceptionally talented at sports. For the next
year
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, we are trying to bring in some of the prestigious international universities as well. Warm regards, Utsav Chandel

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Task Achievement
Consider providing a bit more detailed explanation of why the event is important to the community.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear focus to enhance the overall flow.
Task Achievement
The tone of the letter is warm and appropriate for a community audience.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter has a clear opening, body, and closing structure.
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