the diagrams below show the riverpark area of 20 years ago and the riverpark area now

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The map

illustrate

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illustrates

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the number of development taking place in a

riverpark

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river park

area between 20 years ago and

present

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the present

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day.

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with, there was

curved

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a curved

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estuary

road

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to the north, which can

merge

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merged

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sea and river. On the south of an

estuaru

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estuary

road

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there were petrol

station

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, library and doctor's surgery located and surrounding

this

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a u-shaped sun

road

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was there.

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Further more

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Furthermore

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, on the east side of the estuary

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road

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,road

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there was a collage. On the opposite websites factory and shops were

also

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there. On the both right and left sides of Sun

Road

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a small Woodland where there.

However

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the present

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present day

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present-day

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sea

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seaside

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side

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,side

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a Marine developed. The petrol

station

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and factory

now

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are now

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converted into

post

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a post

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office and supermarket respectively. The president

road

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also

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was also

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built in

supermarket

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the supermarket

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area on son

road

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. At

present day

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present-day

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college is expanded and shops double than previous and

also

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a bird house established on side of Woodland.

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Moreover

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,Moreover

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the railway

station

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bhid

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left

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the left

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of sunset street.

Overall

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it is clear that

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the most noticeable change that occurred in

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the riverpark

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riverpark

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river park

area

which

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apply

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marina

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the marina

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and railway

station

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In addition

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, the library and doctor's surgery

witness

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witnessed

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no changes in their position.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, station with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
26
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

199 words

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the diagrams below show the riverpark area of 20 years ago and the riverpark area now

You are taking a course at a local collage. the deadline for your project was last week but you have not finished it. write a letter to your lecturer. introduce yourself explain why you have not handed in the project yet request more time to do it.

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t is argued that the parents of children who break the rules should be punished in some ways as parents are responsible for the children's actions. To what extent do you agree or desagree?

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to poorer countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?