the diagrams below show the riverpark area of 20 years ago and the riverpark area now

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illustrate

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the number of development taking place in a

riverpark

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river park

area between 20 years ago and

present

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the present

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day.

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with, there was

curved

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estuary

road

to the north, which can

merge

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sea and river. On the south of an

estuaru

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estuary

road

there were petrol

station

, library and doctor's surgery located and surrounding

this

a u-shaped sun

road

was there.

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, on the east side of the estuary

road

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there was a collage. On the opposite websites factory and shops were

also

there. On the both right and left sides of Sun

Road

a small Woodland where there.

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the present

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present day

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sea

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side

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a Marine developed. The petrol

station

and factory

now

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are now

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converted into

post

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office and supermarket respectively. The president

road

also

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built in

supermarket

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area on son

road

. At

present day

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college is expanded and shops double than previous and

also

a bird house established on side of Woodland.

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the railway

station

bhid

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left

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of sunset street.

Overall

it is clear that

the most noticeable change that occurred in

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the riverpark

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riverpark

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river park

area

which

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marina

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the marina

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and railway

station

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, the library and doctor's surgery

witness

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no changes in their position.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, station with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.

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Word repetition
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

199 words

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the diagrams below show the riverpark area of 20 years ago and the riverpark area now

Some people believe that professional athletes serve as positive role models for young people, while others argue that their behavior both on and off the field can have a negative influence. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Some people think that advertising may have positive economic effects. Others think it has negative social effects because advertising makes individuals less satisfied with what they are and have. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that a lot of research is a waste of time and money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination, while others think that there are more important factors such as money and appearance. discuss both views and give your own opinion.